Link: https://youtu.be/t23DO90rGU4
Reflection
I didn't receive too much feedback on my second elevator pitch, but overall the feedback was similar to the first elevator pitch I recorded. The feedback stated that I spoke well, had good gestures, and professionalism. The feedback was positive and included some concrete suggestions about improving my elevator pitch. I didn't have any outrageous or silly feedback. Some feedback suggested that I added more details about how my product specifically works, and how the Do Not Disturb feature on Apple products is inefficient. I agree with this feedback and think that adding more details to my elevator pitch will make it better.
Because of the feedback I received, I decided to add more details about how my product worked. I specifically explained how my product allows employees to set boundaries, and why my product is essential. I continued to speak at a moderate pace, and decided to dress even more professional by adding a blazer and some jewelry.
After performing my pitch three times, it is almost memorized, I am more comfortable in front of the camera, and the pitch is better. It took me less time to film this pitch since I was more comfortable, and I think the changes I made improved the pitch overall.
You presented your pitch very nicely and your business concept came across clearly. I love that you brought in statistics to describe the problem even further. The only thing that left me wondering is whether you are selling your product to consumers/employees or are you selling the product to businesses/employers. I could not really tell what sort of audience you were pitching for but I think if you clarify that, it would be easier to understand your pitch as a whole! Overall, I think you did really good!
ReplyDeleteHi Tara,
ReplyDeleteGreat job delivering your pitch. It was very well organized and thought out. You can tell you put in some practice with it 😊
I agree that downtime is important to not only your work performance, but to balance family life as well. All to often people are either too work oriented or not enough. Your product will ensure that the best and brightest can stay connected when it matters and be able to confidently disconnect when needed.
Hey Tara,
ReplyDeleteYour pitch was absolutely amazing! I loved your introduction, you set the scene perfectly. Your pace and tone of voice was spot on and engaging. You emphasized important messages without overkilling them. I think it was also a smart idea to use statistics to prove the need for your product, as it outlined a problem. I also am impressed by your eye contact. Overall, great job!
Hi Tara!
ReplyDeleteYet again, I liked your pitch. You had a good introduction, and I also liked your business idea as a whole. It is always be nice to be able to get home and just relax after work, without having to worry about what you have to do the next day, or what you didn't get to this day. Overall, I enjoyed your pitch and think you have improved :).